tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-583802824880064447.post8434909626462720888..comments2014-11-26T12:25:15.073-08:00Comments on Storm: Story WritingRimu Studenthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17389483257259220564noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-583802824880064447.post-50253159088458516642014-09-01T14:14:53.047-07:002014-09-01T14:14:53.047-07:00It was really good that you had something to find ...It was really good that you had something to find like the crystal so it makes the story interesting. You had really good structure for the first paragraph, but I think the second paragraph may been a little rushed. Your creativity was good but maybe you could of made the ending a little bit more of a twist instead of your parents having it. You got through a lot of the questions, and the dialogue was great. Overall your story was really good apart from a couple of SPG errors and maybe working on your creativity a bit more but i really enjoyed it. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com